Need business and finance help with a Letter of Interest

It has caught my attention that the J&J
Company is looking to hire an advertising manager. This position is of much
interest to me, and I would like to express my interest by first describing
my qualifications for the job. I have been employed by the J&J Company
for the past ten years now, and I have learned skills and knowledge through
this company that are of much greater value compared to other firms I have
worked with. My experience as the creative director has attributed to much of
my growth as an aspiring businessman and has successfully equipped me to
complete and resolve all projects, tasks, and issues at hand.

As J&J Company’s creative director, I have
been exposed to many different settings and situations. Being placed in such
different situations, I have learned how to adapt myself to many kinds of
environments while continuing to progress each stage of the marketing
process.

I was recently commissioned by the previous
advertising director to create a marketing campaign design plan for J&J Company’s
most recent client, Klean Kanteen. After leading the design team to create
the campaign, one of our team members plagiarized the writing sample for the
campaign ad, which created much dispute between the original source. After
making many emails and phone calls, I took the situation upon myself and made
sure to settle any disputes that almost resulted in possible lawsuits. As the
team leader, I was able to calmly diffuse the problem without hesitation or
delay.

My strengths as a team leader not only qualify
me as an advertising manager, but they also prove my ability to work well
with individuals while nurturing teams for high levels of performance. My
prior experience with J&J Company has given me an advantage and extensive
knowledge of the company that enables me to learn the job quickly, allowing
the company to save time and expenses that would otherwise be sent on
training and other areas of human resources. Hiring me would be very
beneficial for the company both financially and for time-efficiency.

As J&J Company’s creative director, I have
had the opportunity to work closely with the advertising department, allowing
me to build good relationships with the advertising team and learn what they
do. I have found that my current position qualifies me for the role of
advertising manager because both departments requires the same skills and
areas of expertise for high levels of performance. Although I would have to
adjust and expand my role within the company, this position would enable me
to expand my knowledge and responsibility in the company. I fully believe
that I am the best fit for this position because of the dedication, loyalty,
and commitment I have invested to the company already.

Having been with J&J Company for the past
ten years, I am a firm believer of the company mission statement, values,
vision, and beliefs. I would like to take this opportunity to further involve
myself in the company and to take the company further, specifically in the
marketing and advertising department. My qualities, skills, and areas of
expertise prove me to be the best candidate for the job. Please review my
attached resume for my specific qualifications, accomplishments, and work
experience. I can be reached by phone at (555) 555-5555 ext. 7 and by email
at moo@gmail.com. Thank you for taking your time to read my letter of
interest, and I look forward to arranging an interview with you soon.

Sincerely,

M.J.

Creative Director

J&J Company

Writing Performance:

6 – very
effectively communicates the writer’s message.

Writing Trait:

Commentary:

Focus & Meaning

This model response
demonstrates very effective focus and meaning. The writer establishes and
maintains an insightful controlling idea or bottom line, demonstrates a
thorough understanding of the purpose, clearly adapts the message to the
audience, and completes all parts of the task. (“It has caught my
attention that the J&J Company is looking to hire an advertising manager.
This position is of much interest to me, and I would like to express my
interest by first describing my qualifications for the job. I have been
employed by the J&J Company for the past ten years now, and I have
learned skills and knowledge through this company that are of much greater
value compared to other firms I have worked with. My experience as the
creative director has attributed to much of my growth as an aspiring
businessman and has successfully equipped me to complete and resolve all
projects, tasks, and issues at hand.”)

Content &
Development

The response provides
very effective content and development of ideas. The writer develops ideas
fully and memorably, using appropriate concepts and terms. Supporting details
clearly develop ideas very effectively. (“I was recently commissioned by
the previous advertising director to create a marketing campaign design plan
for J&J Company’s most recent client, Klean Kanteen. After leading the
design team to create the campaign, one of our team members plagiarized the
writing sample for the campaign ad, which created much dispute between the
original source. After making many emails and phone calls, I took the
situation upon myself and made sure to settle any disputes that almost
resulted in possible lawsuits. As the team leader, I was able to calmly
diffuse the problem without hesitation or delay.”)

Organization

Very effective
organization is a prime feature of this response. A cohesive and unified
structure, along with effective use of paragraphing or grouping of
information, logical connections, and transitional devices, is demonstrated.
Additionally, the conclusion clearly addresses what is expected of the
readers after reading the document. (“Having been with J&J Company
for the past ten years, I am a firm believer of the company mission
statement, values, vision, and beliefs. I would like to take this opportunity
to further involve myself in the company and to take the company further,
specifically in the marketing and advertising department. My qualities,
skills, and areas of expertise prove me to be the best candidate for the job.
Please review my attached resume for my specific qualifications,
accomplishments, and work experience. I can be reached by phone at (555)
555-5555 ext. 7 and by email at moo@gmail.com. Thank you for taking your time
to read my letter of interest, and I look forward to arranging an interview
with you soon.”)

Language Use &
Style

Very effective use of
language and style is apparent throughout the response. The writing
demonstrates precise, professional language and word choice, a defined voice,
and a clear sense of audience, along with the presence of well-structured and
varied sentences. The following compound sentence is used effectively:
“This position is of much interest to me, and I would like to express my
interest by first describing my qualifications for the job.”

Mechanics &
Conventions

This sample response
shows very effective control of mechanics and conventions. There are few or
no errors in punctuation, spelling and usage, and grammar and sentence
structure. The response effectively demonstrates correct use of punctuation
(i.e., apostrophes, colons, commas, hyphens, italics, parentheses, periods,
quotation marks, and semicolons), excellent spelling (and word usage), and
correct grammar (i.e., excellent use of subject-verb agreement, pronoun use,
parallel structure, and sentence structure; particularly a lack of fragments
and run-ons). (“My strengths as a team leader not only qualify me as an
advertising manager, but they also prove my ability to work well with
individuals while nurturing teams for high levels of performance. My prior experience
with J&J Company has given me an advantage and extensive knowledge of the
company that enables me to learn the job quickly, allowing the company to
save time and expenses that would otherwise be sent on training and other
areas of human resources.”)