Long history among philosophers and psychologies [Laura P4] when it comes to Freud [Laura P5] unconscious mind was mainly a reservoir of repression being in the form of repressed memories associated with traumatic experience together with repressed socially unacceptable desires, wishes, or ideas. [Laura P6]
Freud believed that this reservoir of repression has the ability to act in ways that are unconscious, to the conscious mind of the person in question, to the extent of affecting how a person use [Laura P7] to behave, or how a person felt comfortable while behaving. [Laura P8] This means that individuals are always not ready [Laura P9] or in a position to explicitly face a traumatic or socially unacceptable event that
They [Laura P10] have repressed psychologically with the aid of therapist assisting as a mediator[Laura P11] through the process of psychoanalysis[Laura P12] an individual may get help. By facilitating these individuals to face their repressions, hence, allowing what is hidden to show itself[Laura P13] . On the other hand, Jung came up
With the ideal [Laura P14] of collective unconscious and personal unconscious (Argosy University 2016[Laura P15] ) He stated that individual Unconscious is set of feelings that are repressed together with thoughts that are experienced[Laura P16] these thoughts and feelings develop during a individualâ€˜s lifetime of the person. Collective consciousness it [Laura P17] is typically modes of memory, thoughts, feelings, and expression and set –
Inherited that can affect some people[Laura P18] . The two, that is, Jung and Freud could agree when it came to the idea that individuals may have feelings, thoughts, events. Especially traumatic that is repressed.[Laura P19] Jungâ€™s personal consciousness is the same as the argument of Freud when it comes to unconscious. According to the two, Anna has some repressed memories[Laura P20] . Her repressed memories
Are those that are associated with what her father was going through. (Argosy University) Her father who she was very close to [Laura P21] was very ill. What her father was going through at the time made her develop psychologically some repressed memories[Laura P22] . These memories that Anna repressed eventually started to act out. Being unconscious, they acted on conscious mind. Their effect on conscious mind were the symptoms that were being experienced by Anna, such as loss
of appetite leading to not eating any meals, severe nervous cough, anemia, and weakness[Laura P23] among others. The effect of the repressed memories could even be clearly seen when her father died since Annaâ€™s symptoms grew even further. The loss of her father affected her vision also. She also l[Laura P24] ost ability to focus, experienced some hallucination, and attempted suicide a number of
([Laura P25] Times (Frey-Rohm, 1974)[Laura P26] Jung and Freud may have approached the treatment of Anna by acting as mediators. The best intervention that is required by Anna or to be administered by both Freud and Jung is therapeutic intervention. Anna has a lot of memories that are repressed. The repressed memories are those of her fatherâ€™s illness and suffering. This makes her to have both
Conscious mind and unconscious mind[Laura P27] .. The presence of these two caused her to shift between normal state and manic-type state. Therapeutic intervention will play an important role in enabling Anna to deal with both the unconscious and conscious mind (normal state and manic-type state) (Hurst, 1982). This will be possible by bringing out or making it known to Anna what is in her unconscious mind, and also ways of effectively dealing with them[Laura P28] .
Hurst, L. C. (1982). What was wrong with Anna O? Journal of the Royal Society of
Medicine, 75(2), 129â€“131.
You have a nice start to providing some general information on the theories of both Freud and Jung. However, much of the writing is somewhat difficult to follow and some of your descriptions are extremely similar to those in the assignment instructions. In order to form an effective essay from the information you have gathered, here are my main recommendations:
1) All outside information must be properly documented. Be sure to write in your own words, using only brief quotes as necessary and properly paraphrasing by rewording the content entirely. In either case, include a standard APA style in-text citation (Author, year, page) to indicate the source of any outside evidence.
Cite a Source in APA
APA is the style guide for the American Psychological Association. When we give credit to a source in an APA paper, we want to include the authorâ€™s last name, the year of publication, and the page or paragraph number:
Tyrion resented his father, but still craved his approval (Martin, 2000, p. 442).
Sometimes, we do not have a page number. This is often true if the source is online instead of a paper source. We count the paragraph number in this case.
The George R.R. Martin book A Feast for Crows is primarily about the damage of war to ordinary people (Collins, 2012, para. 2).
In some cases, we will not have an author, either. In this case, we write the title of the story or article in place of the author. We use quotation marks around this title.
One theory of book readers is that there are one or several secret Targaryen family members living under different names (â€œAegon Targaryen Theoriesâ€, 2013, para. 3).
If you mention the authorâ€™s name in the sentence, it does not need to appear in the citation. But we move the year of publication right after it:
Andy Greenwaldâ€™s (2013) recaps of Game of Thrones trade in-depth analysis for clichÃ©d humor; he called Oleanna Tyrell â€œLady Karsnarkâ€ (para. 8).
2) A standard essay outline would be helpful for organizing your content. Begin with an introduction to explain the main subject, provide background information, and end with a clear Thesis statement (state the paperâ€™s purpose and identify the supporting topics). Follow with 2-4 body paragraphs, each addressing one supporting point; all should begin with relevant Topic Sentences. End the paper with a conclusion paragraph to restate the thesis, summarize the main points, and make a final statement about their implications.
Introducing a Paper
Introductions present a problem to a reader and point towards the solution. An effective introduction guides a reader from general information to a specific point of view.
A good introduction has these parts:
1) The hook
2) The current situation
3) The problem statement
4) The consequences of the problem
5) The solution to the problemâ€”the thesis
Begin your introduction with baitâ€”a fascinating detail or story from your researchâ€”so that you can entice your reader to keep going. If your paper is about the dangers of internet addiction, you can start with a fact that shows how many people have a serious problem with the internet.
In the past year, more than 200,000 Americans have sought treatment for internet addiction.
This hook shows us the scope of internet addiction by connecting it to numbers. Now we transition to showing the readers how this problem has disrupted the status quo.
The internet has given us access to more information and entertainment, but it can absorb a lot of our attention.
Now we have begun to establish the problem. The status quo is that internet access gives us entertainment. The problem is the addictive behavior that often results. But why should readers be worried about becoming addicted to the internet? We need to establish consequences so readers understand the scope and severity of the problem.
Internet abuse can lead to neglect of self-care: absence from school or employment, lack of cleanliness, and/or loss of social interaction. This problem can only increase as access to high-speed internet increases.
Last, youâ€™ll want to add your thesis statement.
But internet addiction can be fought. Users can carefully schedule their internet time, use computer programs that artificially limit their internet access, and seek treatment to mitigate internet abuse.
Now we can put them all together:
In the past year, more than 200,000 Americans have sought treatment for internet addiction. The internet has given us access to more information and entertainment, but it can absorb a lot of our attention. Internet abuse can lead to neglect of self-care: absence from school or employment, lack of cleanliness, and/or loss of social interaction. This problem can only increase as access to high-speed internet increases. But internet addiction can be fought. Users can carefully schedule their internet time, use computer programs that artificially limit their internet access, and seek treatment to mitigate internet abuse.
Now readers have been introduced to the threat of internet addiction, understand who it can affect, and see a potential solution. Making a Thesis
A thesis statement is a one-sentence version of your argument. It contains two ingredients: a claim and reasons for believing it.
Music sales have declined in the past decade because the internet has made stealing music easier, as well as giving users the option to buy individual songs instead of entire albums.
This thesis makes a claim about why music sales have declined and identifies two reasons why sales are lower than they used to be. Itâ€™s specific about the reasons why.
Your thesis has to fit the space available for the rest of the paper. If you write
Music sales have declined due to changes in technology.
Weâ€™re not sure how long a time period we are supposed to consider, or how many types of technology the paper may cover (records, cassettes, CDs, etc.).
Music sales have declined in the past decade because of the internet.
This claim is still vague because we do not know how the internet has caused sales to decline; the writer leaves this connection to the readerâ€™s imagination. Our original example, which lists two reasons, gives us the expectation that the final paper will show us how much sales have declined, and how these developments have measurably contributed to it.
The Goals of a Topic Sentence
A topic sentence has two goals. The first goal is to state the main topic of the paragraph. This topic sentence should be the first sentence or (if the first sentence is a transition from the previous paragraph) second sentence in the paragraph.
The second goal of a topic sentence is to connect this paragraph to the thesis of the paper. It tells us why the main idea of the paragraph is important to the paperâ€™s whole argument.
For example, letâ€™s say you have a paper about the effects of removing trees.
Every year, thousands of trees are removed from the Amazon rainforest. These trees take years to regrow, and the loss of trees causes thousands of plant and animal deaths in the ecosystem. These species have unique physiologies, so keeping them alive may help us find the cures for many diseases.
The main point of this paragraph is that removing trees for our benefit may deprive us of other, more important benefits.
Removing trees for our benefit may deprive us of other, more important benefits. Every year, thousands of trees are removed from the Amazon rainforest. These trees take years to regrow, and the loss of trees causes thousands of plant and animal deaths in the ecosystem. These species have unique physiologies, so keeping them alive may help us find the cures for many diseases.
The topic sentence calls our attention to the idea that this paper is about the effects of forest removal.
3) Try reading the paper aloud as you revise. This will help you to detect and correct any grammatical errors, awkward phrasing, and frequent Run-Ons.
How to Fix a Run-On Sentence
Run-on sentences contain more than one idea, but those ideas are not separated by punctuation. These sentences confuse readers because they are not sure where one idea ends and another begins.
Here is an example of a run-on sentence.
My family gets together for Thanksgiving dinner every year we serve both turkey and ham and eat at halftime of the second football game.
We can turn a run-on sentence into a compound sentence if the ideas are related, or several smaller sentences if they are not.
1. Identify the main ideas. Locate the main subjects and verbs: family gets together, we serve, and [we] eat. List each of them with their predicates.
i) My family gets together for Thanksgiving dinner every year
ii) Every year we serve both turkey and ham
iii) We eat at halftime of the second football game
2. Next, we make some decisions. For instance, does the expression â€œevery yearâ€ belong to the first idea, the second, or both? We should not place it with both ideas, so we have to decide where it is most effective. We also add the subject â€œweâ€ for the third idea of the sentence.
3. Now we can rewrite this run-on sentence as three separate statements:
My family gets together for Thanksgiving dinner every year. We serve both turkey and ham. We eat at halftime of the second football game.
This is one way to rephrase the original sentence, but itâ€™s a little repetitive.
4. Add sentence variety. We might decide that the second and third idea both tell us what the meal is like, so we can keep them together in a compound sentence. We can replace the period with a comma and a conjunction (a joining word).
My family gets together for Thanksgiving dinner every year. We serve both turkey and ham, and we eat at halftime of the second football game.
[Laura P4]Word choice: Should this be â€œpsychologists?â€
[Laura P6]Run on: The length and wording of this sentence make it difficult to follow. You address two separate points here, which should be used to form two statements.
[Laura P7]Tense: Use the past tense here, â€œused.â€
[Laura P8]Sentence clarity: The phrasing here is somewhat unclear. Try reading the paper aloud to help you reword sentences to be clearer.
[Laura P9]Sentence clarity: This would be clearer as â€œnot always ready.â€